DavidGibbs6

Bird of the Gods chapter 3 is up and if you're following along you can find it here.
          	
          	
          	https://www.wattpad.com/story/325714704
          	
          	
          	If you haven't been following then it's not too late and you can start here.
          	
          	
          	https://www.wattpad.com/story/325675473
          	
          	
          	Come and see what it looks like when 16 writers collaborate and Don't forget to check out the @adultfiction profile
          	
          	

DavidGibbs6

Have you ever read a serialized novel? Would you like to? 
          
          I have been working with a group of talented authors on a novel called Bird of the Gods. It's an archaeological, action/adventure, treasure hunt story with a little romance along the way.
          
          Written with 16 other authors, my chapter dropped today and follows @basketballdemon's excellent chapter 1. The next chapter will be released in 4 days and will be found on @Jinnis profile. 
          
          So follow the leads across wattpad to read the whole novel as it's released. 
          
          Don't forget to check out the @adultfiction profile for authors interviews and more on this Writer's Relay project.
          

RJGlynn

Woo! Good luck for the Gloves Up smack down. I was tempted to dive in too, but still had the Ultimate SciFi smackdown to survive. All the best. Looking forward to the next story; you’ve a great writing style! :) Thanks for the follow.

DavidGibbs6

@RJGlynn thanks heaps. And best of luck in the Smackdown too. :)
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elveloy

@DavidGibbs6  Hi!  Just noticed you come from Adelaide too!  How bout that? :)

DavidGibbs6

@elveloy Actually I came from the Riverland, but I now reside in Adelaide. I just noticed you won the Sci-Fi Smackdown, good work and you were up against some big names in there. Suitably impressed.
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SamHayler

Thank you for reading 'Raiko', it's much appreciated. I'd love to hear your thoughts on it so far :)

DavidGibbs6

You write really well and I love the wordcraft you use. I found it emotional, even in a short space (could be because of my own son) If anything, you could do with a little more description in the last chapter. Chapter three was a little surreal and lacked enough emotional punch. eg If I got that phone call I would go home instantly. I would be out the door and gone. When I got home and found the blood I would be frantic and when they weren't there, then I would turn to jelly, colapse on the floor and cry, closely followed by anger and revenge and a lot of sword slashing and maybe some torture. But that's just me. You have pinned it as a superhero story and as far as origin storys go it's fairly run of the mill, but I think its delivered skillfully enough to pull it off. I'm really interested in what will make it a superhero story and I'm looking forward to reading more. Keep it up, you have the tallent for it.
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